Acclude's Poetry Thread

[Gemini]

Here is a freestyle....

Life revolves only around the merciless
Disturbing thoughts of innocents linger in my subconscious
Is hope real or just a pigment in a giant collage of co-operate thugs
Driven by the motivation and focused by uncompromise
I will amount , i will succeed, I will overcome
Thus this far, only failure exist in my present
But my future holds less than i imagine
But more than is promised.
Love interrupts focus but brings a higher level of appreciation
Appreciation becomes my muse.....

Ok, thats enough....hope it makes sense to some of you guys?

[Kurobei]

Here is a freestyle....

Life revolves only around the merciless
Disturbing thoughts of innocents linger in my subconscious
Is hope real or just a pingent in giant collage of co-operate thugs
Driven by the motivation and focused by uncomprise
I will amount , i will succeed, I will overcome
Thus this far, only failure exist in my present
But my future holds less than i imagine
But more than is promised.
Love interrupts focus but brings a higher level of appreciation
Appreciation becomes my muse.....

Ok, thats enough....hope it makes sense to some of you guys?

Perfect sense good shiet man

All you guys got some skills, it takes alot of thought and creativity to come up with poems or freestyles.

[ACCLUDE91]

I can't freestyle. Alls I ever think about it is cheez doodles and ice cream

Good shit accordtunerZZ

[Gemini]

Perfect sense good shiet man

All you guys got some skills, it takes alot of thought and creativity to come up with poems or freestyles.

thanx bro.....I've always been able to do this shit but only used it to impressed girls. noticed if i actually took time I do some really good. Jus a hint for some of you guys, you dont need to rhyme in every line!

[Gemini]

one more for the road.....

the smell of warm asphalt on a sunny summer day brings me exctasy
As I'm about to embark upon something victorious
With a inperfect sphere clutched under my arms,
I walk swiftly towards my utopia
A smile followed by a grin as I approach mere mortals
Most of these faces are familiar but some are bleak to memory
Routine follows thought,
Stretch, hop, stretch , hop
Then like a uncontrollable attraction,
my eyes gaze upon the metal cylinder to whom I've become accustom
Reminiscent of previous highlights bring ideas of entertainment to mind
With the strut of a gladiator I enter my arena
Deep breathes are taken , swift movements,
follow by a graceful airborne displace of control
Once again my reign remains en sync upon contact with the rust filled orb....

To all who dont know....this about basketball....seems more like story but I was thinking about my younger days when I ate, slept and breathe basketball.

[ACCLUDE91]

good stuff

I wonder how many other poets/freestylers/rhymers/writers we have on this site!

[Gemini]

good stuff

I wonder how many other poets/freestylers/rhymers/writers we have on this site!

I would like to know also, maybe we could compete?? j/k I like reading other peoples work so I can see what level I'm on and if I need to improve. I use to do the same thing when I was into Art/Painting/sketching but got to busy for that.

[King James]

good stuff

I wonder how many other poets/freestylers/rhymers/writers we have on this site!

I write stuff...I basically do it when i feel stressed out so its all about stuff that is happening in my life at that point in time...Its cool to read back on stuff i wrote when i was 15 and realize how things have changed.

[ehulst]

i'll post one of mine when i find it...

here's a bro's of mine:

Showers of tears,
rains of blood,
more to fear,
than who to trust,
cant decide,
for I am lost,
cant betray,
the ones I love.

Sitting alone in a whitewashed room,
thinkin of times, when I wasnt alone,
dwelling on what ive gone without.
Walking a path of fresh cut grass,
dreaming of times, long gone and past,
light wind sweeps by, and im hit afresh,
with memories, Id all but forget.
Reminisce of times, when I was fun,
of times when, i would laugh and run,
everyone would play along,
then something changed, and I was alone.
Bong hits, and razor slits,
changed my dreams, into nights of fits,
how I would love, to undo all this,
and change myself, into the once loved kid.
But now he's gone, and its only me,
with no feelings, an empty shell,
Who will listen, who will care,
who will tell my trusted secrets there,
The good life once ruined, never again,
now its the good life,
the trusted, the true.
Sifting through new thoughts,
discarding the old,
Ive been true to my words,
at no cost to you,
held deep my own thoughts,
and now venting them here,
a place where I can scream,
and no one can hear.
Running along, a crestfallen land,
along with my own doubts,
theres no place for fear,
dreams are a place, that no one can steal,
join me in a dream,
it will be just us two.

Showers of tears,
rains of blood,
more to fear,
than who to trust,
cant decide,
for I am lost,
cant betray,
the ones I love.

[ACCLUDE91]

I felt that one. It hit home with quite a few things. Very good!

[ehulst]

yeah he was nuts on this shit, he and i use to freestyle out on IM sophmore year he would school my ass, he was nasty at it.... until he met a bitch that has changed his life from being cool to being a total ass, his parents or real brothers dont see him, and he doesn't even hang out with me ever, shes 24/7 and he takes so much shit from her.....

[ACCLUDE91]

realations will make or break you
turn you inside out and change you
sometimes it's good and sometimes it's bad
but losin all your friends & family can't make you glad
if you get stuck up their ass too soon
you might lose your mind and turn into a loon
it's best to start out slow
and if it's right, things will grow
too many important people in your life
to just drop everyone and be with your "wife"
you gotta learn to prioritize
cut the shit and see through females lies
remember who came first
and always remember who's the worst
there's a limit to everything
get suck in too hard and you may just have to start from the beginning

[ehulst]

...figures, my old lap top that blew up had all my own lyric's on em...ah oh well.....

[ehulst]

alright, it needs some work and probably a little time, but heres something i just made up


Thoughts sink in the mind like a brick,
Into this child that once was so thick.
I’ve changed over the years,
And overcome some fears.
But some still are here,
Running away in my own mental escapade.

Living here, living there,
I never really figured Id be here; upstairs,
Sittin’ in my room typing this here poem,
Having my thoughts roll out into a line of computer font.
It’s funny how you can sit for hours thinking of nothing,
And just zone into your own thinking.

Our brains have memories and stories stashed away behind our skull,
Just waiting to come and run like hell.
Bringing thoughts of old times back,
Seeing those days, that you once lived,
Only to show that you were that stuck up kid.
That was so thick headed, nothing could sink it.
People hated you because of what you liked,
And people liked you cause you didn’t ever fight.
You were an honest fella, in those days of growing up,
But Things have changed now so get off of this

My how things have changed since you moved away.
You had to leave that one chick that meant the world to you.
Only find she got with this other tool,
That she thought was oh so cool.

Sucks doesn’t it,
When you waited 4 years to here some of that bulls***.
It feels like a stab to the chest,
Only to find nuttin’ but a bullet proof vest.
You once loved her you swore,
But only made your heart sore.

You made some mistakes,
But made them like video takes,
CUT one, CUT two,
And none of which were you.
Things got better from there,
And slowly progress to here,
After putting everything to rest
You finally put it all into a bird nest.
Hoping someday a chick will hatch from that nest,
The one littered with thoughts and memories you laid to rest.

[zipcreature]

I support you in your poetry NICE!

- Zipcreature